Wednesday, October 22, 2008

What I Needed To Say

you swore you loved me
you told me i was your everything
i told you i wouldnt sleep with you
all that flew out the door
the words got louder and meaner
your face got redder
i tried to yell louder for you to hear me
you grabbed my arm tight
i told you your hurting me
you only tighened your grip
as the tears formed in my eyes
you yelled at me to stop crying
that this was my fault
all i had to do was listen
and do what you asked
i got away from you strong grip
my arm already bruising
i yelled at you
that you were nothing to me
that your words couldnt save you this time
im done forgiving you
as i turned my back to walk away
you yelled to me that i was to never
in this lifetime to turn my back to you
i felt the sharp pain hit my back
i fell to my kneesyet another pain same spot
i was now face to face with the hardwood
as i rolled over your arm was cocked back
ready to give another blow
you got your face right up to mine
and in a heartbreaking voice
you told me noone would ever
again call me beautiful
before you hand got to me
i swung head on hit
as the blood dripped from your nose
i realized what i had done
and i knew if i stuck around
it would be my end
i got up fast as i could
ran for the door it opened
you werent far behind me
with your blood on my hand
and mine on my shirt
i ran faster then ever before
i gott outta there
this wasnt my fault
this is noones but your own
you hurt me one to many times
trying to fade you away into my memory
but this bruise it stays to remind me
of that night
of that time that i said no
and paid for it
this bruise it wont dissapear
but you my dear are already gone
so why couldnt I say
goodbye


Kronzer this was taken care of no worries :)

5 comments:

d_rek said...

verry good....very descriptive, it could use some breaks and spliting up of the lines.

i love candy! said...

wow.
very powerful.
idk if its strong word choice of if its just a strong subject, either way it is strong. and you are strong. kudos.

brittaemily said...

i like it! its really sad but I totally can feel what you are feeling. good start!:)

Trigger Happy Arcade said...

Strong emotions flows upon these words, an incident not long forgotten. Well done.

Kronzer said...

I agree with Derek about the breaks. Really strong visuals--especially in the middle.

Look at the end--I think it can be stronger (clearer) in terms of how you feel now and how you felt about him.

(Thanks for the disclaimer) ;)

Good stuff, sister.